ARE WE DEAD OR ALIVE?

Beneath the velvet shroud of night,
where shadows weep,
I weave a melody of sorrow,
secrets I must keep.

No malice meant, no cruel design,
just longing’s sting,
To paint your smile on moonlit clouds,
a song my heart would sing.

In every sigh, a nocturne’s grace,
a cosmic ballet spun,
Where pain and beauty waltz as one,
by whispers of the sun.
My canvas bleeds with indigo,
a symphony’s command,
To chase away the shadows there,
and hold your laughing hand.

Oh, let the lyre of dawn ignite,
on strings of memory,
A dance of souls,
where past and present weave tapestry.
In echoes born of wind and tide,
where moonbeams softly gleam,
I yearn to see you pirouette,
a radiant, joyful dream.

No merchant’s bargain binds this art,
no currency of fame,
Just whispers on the starlight’s breath,
a whispered lover’s name.
Across the cosmic canvas vast,
where galaxies convene,
My brush seeks only your delight,
your laughter bathed in sheen.

So let the purple rain descend,
a curtain for our stage,
Where every drop, a crystal kiss,
turns grief to gilded page.
For in this symphony of woe,
where hope’s last ember glows,
My heart finds solace, finding you,
where laughter overflows.

:: 01.15.2024 ::

Poet’s Comments:

This poem, titled “ARE WE DID OR ALIVE,” reflects a profound exploration of emotions, blending elements of melancholy and longing with a sense of cosmic beauty. I have attempted to display a mastery of language and a keen sensitivity to the interplay of emotions.

The use of vivid imagery is striking, such as “Beneath the velvet shroud of night, where shadows weep,” creating a visual and emotional atmosphere. The recurring theme of night, shadows, and moonlit clouds establishes a poetic setting that allows for the expression of deeper emotions.

I employed a musical metaphor, referring to a “melody of sorrow” and a “nocturne’s grace,” adding a layer of complexity to the emotional landscape. This musicality extends to the cosmic imagery, where “pain and beauty waltz as one” and the poet’s canvas bleeds with indigo, capturing the cosmic ballet of emotions.

The yearning expressed in the lines “To paint your smile on moonlit clouds, a song my heart would sing” and “I yearn to see you pirouette, a radiant, joyful dream” conveys a deep emotional connection, perhaps with a distant or lost love. The intertwining of past and present in a dance of souls adds a temporal dimension to the poem, enhancing its depth.

The poem also touches on the theme of artistic creation, emphasizing the purity of the poet’s intentions. The lines “No merchant’s bargain binds this art, no currency of fame” suggest a devotion to art for its own sake, free from external influences.

The use of natural elements, such as wind, tide, moonbeams, and purple rain, contributes to the cosmic and elemental nature of the poem. The incorporation of these elements into the emotional landscape creates a rich tapestry of feelings and sensations.

Ultimately, the poem concludes on a note of solace and hope, finding comfort in the midst of sorrow through the imagined presence of the beloved. The closing lines, “For in this symphony of woe, where hope’s last ember glows, My heart finds solace, finding you, where laughter overflows,” bring a sense of resolution and emotional fulfillment to the reader.

As a work of poetry, this piece showcases a masterful command of language, a profound exploration of emotions, and an artful blending of imagery and metaphor.